woo
freaking.
hew.


Happyness: The lieHappyness is something no longer measured, a Desire all men and women equally seek, seeking, making us one, differences forgotten, one things they have found the path to happyness, finding out they sell their own lives...their souls..their own happyness that they never knew they had, Becoming that witch they feared to become.... Naiive they may be to forget it, or to ignore it.... those who shrug and laugh at the truth, are often afraid of it..deep inside.Happyness: The lie
Don't sell your soul for happyness... it's already there...
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SQUEAK.
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Incoherency to the cries of others.
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SQUEAK.
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Incoherency to the cries of others.
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SQUEAK.
Keep working on the writing; don't be afraid to try new subjects and ask for critique.
I'd advise you to go through your poems line-by-line and edit. You've got a lot words that are spelled correctly but misued, i.e. witch instead of which and tough instead of though.
I plan to later overhaul the poems with their new versions.
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Incoherency to the cries of others.
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~A man who can not uphold his beliefs is worthless in this world and the next.~
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